tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post5498743160716331093..comments2024-02-21T09:02:10.761-05:00Comments on Two Bears Farm and the Three Cubs: Sarah's Journey - The Red Dress ClubLisa @ Two Bears Farmhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03464839163693785901noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post-16714934691780931072011-05-16T21:17:46.914-04:002011-05-16T21:17:46.914-04:00Oh wow---when she cleaned that raspberry bush, I k...Oh wow---when she cleaned that raspberry bush, I knew bad things were in store, especially after not having eaten anything in so long. Poor Sarah!<br /><br />This was full of such wonderful imagery and description!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13214914707096410664noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post-66049412262460893072011-05-15T08:48:15.597-04:002011-05-15T08:48:15.597-04:00Oh yeah. I'm so glad you've written anothe...Oh yeah. I'm so glad you've written another Sarah story. I LOVE the setting, the voice.<br />Her gorging on the raspberries is so well written. Love the effect of the tartness across her jaw.<br /><br />And now I need to know more.Mad Woman behind the Bloghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01242756976126497437noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post-8088699869966029302011-05-13T22:25:13.582-04:002011-05-13T22:25:13.582-04:00You have chickens on your blog.
The writing is exc...You have chickens on your blog.<br />The writing is excellent ... but CHICKENS ... oh my. And the first sentence, I LOVED it.<br /><br />I'm thinking I'll be back often.le Chefhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07901186271246515448noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post-40822208402433892622011-05-13T22:11:00.433-04:002011-05-13T22:11:00.433-04:00Oh the pain from eating those unripe berries and s...Oh the pain from eating those unripe berries and so many of them must have been excruciating! <br /><br />You have some great imagery with this.Carriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03472645003197467754noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post-83712249566904224972011-05-13T21:28:02.306-04:002011-05-13T21:28:02.306-04:00Every single time I read this story line I love it...Every single time I read this story line I love it. The narrative voice really works for me. <br /><br />I thought her eating the bush bare was such a great act of desperation, especially since given as much as she knows about her wilderness, she must have known what the consequences would have been.Jenniferhttp://whispatory.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post-51630542633771976532011-05-13T18:54:16.978-04:002011-05-13T18:54:16.978-04:00Why is she running? Did she do something wrong? Wh...Why is she running? Did she do something wrong? Why is she trying to escape away from the pastor? These are probably things you are working on still, but those are the questions that came to mind between this piece and the last piece. It's unclear to me if the winter has passed and the snow has melted away or not as well.<br /><br />I like what you are writing here though, and I want MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE! I got stomach cramps!{Stephanie}The Drama Mamahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01643310288610990260noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post-50847151075973588482011-05-13T18:41:41.873-04:002011-05-13T18:41:41.873-04:00That was so well written, I felt her hunger and an...That was so well written, I felt her hunger and anguish!!!...:)JPjp@A Green Ridgehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15217268829093983376noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post-91784767744495763232011-05-13T15:14:30.502-04:002011-05-13T15:14:30.502-04:00Poor Sarah! I could so feel her hunger, her desper...Poor Sarah! I could so feel her hunger, her desperation, her pain. You captured it all lady!<br /><br />My favorite line: "Just a touch of sweet and sour hit her nose." It's gentle, poetic, I could smell it, too!Galit Breenhttp://theselittlewaves.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post-20866265740176049152011-05-12T14:20:05.762-04:002011-05-12T14:20:05.762-04:00I knew it would come to no good if she swallowed a...I knew it would come to no good if she swallowed all those berries whole! I hope she finds a prince in the woods and lives happily ever after, how about arranging a meeting with a frog?Ginny Hartzlerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09329131153403895625noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post-11950654581330415092011-05-12T13:48:50.073-04:002011-05-12T13:48:50.073-04:00I loved this, Lisa. This was one of your best fict...I loved this, Lisa. This was one of your best fiction posts yet, I think. Honest! I want to push her past this horror and have her found, passed out, by some kind and gentle man, able to help her get cleaned up, fed and so much more on their way to happily ever after!<br /><br />The only line I had a question about was this one, "but already past the morels. She’d found some tubers and some ramps, but she was hungry most of the time." <br /><br />I don't know what morels are, or tubers and ramps, so I was close to skimming and could have done OK with just going on to the She was hungry part. Just my 10c as a non-earthy girl. ;) But I <3 Sarah!Andreahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06972798018825603047noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post-90233823695303008612011-05-12T13:32:21.943-04:002011-05-12T13:32:21.943-04:00Relief sure didn't come easy. That was wonderf...Relief sure didn't come easy. That was wonderful!Liz Mayshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13960276167677132860noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post-76798232489223767772011-05-12T12:51:19.907-04:002011-05-12T12:51:19.907-04:00I like this girl. She has moxie. You just know she...I like this girl. She has moxie. You just know she's going to make it. But first, let's get her cleaned up and in a nice warm bath!Cherylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14025221975648580117noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post-79842418016931193362011-05-12T12:21:41.052-04:002011-05-12T12:21:41.052-04:00You're such a talented writer! Love the story...You're such a talented writer! Love the story:)Nancy Grossi ~ Churned In Cali ~ The Wife of a Dairymanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14800230886117255959noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post-14830676879468174662011-05-12T09:52:21.381-04:002011-05-12T09:52:21.381-04:00Lisa,
Great writing!
It doesn't seem like it c...Lisa,<br />Great writing!<br />It doesn't seem like it can get any worse for this poor girl! I love your writing-it's so descriptive! I felt like I was there, but thank goodness I was only reading...<br /><br />I can't wait to read more of this story-and by the way, I put some pie in my post-just for you:)Valerie Boersmahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08372768206512562126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post-24970884320210194552011-05-12T09:30:13.038-04:002011-05-12T09:30:13.038-04:00I so want to clean her up and help her find a safe...I so want to clean her up and help her find a safe place to be with warm meal.JDaniel4's Momhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10354900916937838719noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post-53640003616217227402011-05-12T09:09:20.402-04:002011-05-12T09:09:20.402-04:00oh, this poor child. i just want to find her, cle...oh, this poor child. i just want to find her, clean her up and give her a warm bed to sleep in...<br /><br />'a hatching of bloody scrape marks' - GREAT line.TexWisGirlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15510099344729038541noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post-74111812294021821332011-05-12T08:26:37.140-04:002011-05-12T08:26:37.140-04:00I hope Sarah felt better after her stomach was so ...I hope Sarah felt better after her stomach was so upset. Very well written story. I love the mountains but rain and barefoot??Kim@stuffcould....https://www.blogger.com/profile/03566751822418137457noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5356235511941477035.post-57084953797022721942011-05-12T07:36:46.747-04:002011-05-12T07:36:46.747-04:00I can totally see this as a reality back in the da...I can totally see this as a reality back in the day. Great writing, Lisa. :)Nancyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06116903234641971344noreply@blogger.com